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Moonchild


Maiden of the night a breath taking splendor
Outshines million of stars that blanket the sky,
Ocean her timeless lover dances to her melody
Natural is their love which will never fade or die,
Churning hearts who look upon her ethereal face
Hums a song of desire to grow within love birds,
In one tender moment she takes them to a dream place
Lighting a trail to explore passion’s unspoken words,
Destiny rests in her hand when souls lock in embrace.


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  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    October 5

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    Very Good

    This is a lovely poem of love and moon light on the ocean,I love theocean at night time ,the swishing of the waves and the white foam it leaves on the sand.


  • HaydenMessenger silver member
    June 5

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    These poetic descriptions have so much depth it makes me want to dive right in. My favourite line was "Ocean her timeless lover dances to her melody" - perfect use of language. To see the natural world through a poet's eyes is a wonderful thing, and this poem captures just that for the reader. Beautifully written, thanks for sharing.

  • buddy4u2know
    May 31

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    this is a awesome write you have penned. I like it a lot. I hope you do well in your contest. You should, don't worry...


  • thedarkking
    May 30
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    Wow, this gets on a sacr1-10 a 100, this is beast! i mean awsome


  • paullallady silver member
    May 30

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    You have painted a beautiful, and serene picture with your words. This was terrific. I love your wording and imagery. great job on this one.


  • Antebellum
    May 29
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    this is amazing. I love the rhyming you used..very good. it flows beautifuly.


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    May 29

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    anytime I see the word etheral used...I'm in!! I love that word!! awesom usage of it here in this piece. great job poet. I enjoyed your writing very much...peace and light always in all ways, kp


  • Legend silver member
    May 29

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    A fine Acrostic and one that rhymes as well Many just fill in words to fit letters without making the whole thing work This does well done Good luck in the contest


  • spiritraven
    May 25
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    Good Job

    Nice flow, rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck

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