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That Adam ... I just had the pleasure to meet him... .
Found him shredding wood today with his thumb.
An honest man, faithful ... trusting, relying in God ...
he's centered, can do the math,
lives his life, strait from the heart.
A common man stands right smack dab in the middle.
Can break down a ruler by half,
be it whatever the width, length, depth ... or height!
Lives his life, full throttle ...
places himself right there in position,
first thing in the morning.
Yep ... he's got a bum knee
but still he hits the ground in the morning just a running.
Knows life's just one big grey area!
A free for all a glorious free fall,given free ... for all.
Knows just when to pull the shoot!
Believes life's a perfect science.
He's everything but off kilter.
Maps his life out in his head,
something doesn't quite figure ...
holds his head high ...
waves his white flag ...
of surrender.
Takes it all as it comes.
Called out to me the other day ...
threw out his hand sat me down beside his confidence ...
shared with my wife and me my boys ...
dinner, offered me a beer!
Because Honest, open and willing, I walked up, accepted his calling,
I'm working with him now started today matter of fact or so to speak!
But truly though I feel we're just hanging out.
Building a porch with him ... plan to secure it with a roof,
and extension for grilling ... sealing fan ... lights,
corn hole boards in the floor
two fences within to house all his dogs, the works!
Working-hard to live in peace, yep ...
one mighty hand gentle true.
Like few he is that Adam, a humble man of God ...
building up his simple life, through-the-mercy-of-his-hand.
So-hey man ... me, wouldn't-even think to-cross-him,
because-my-friend to be sure ... I can respect him for this!
So-if-any, there's a plan you're betting on,
well you'd be better just to "pull the shoot" ...
believe this, it be best you have another look ...
because bud I tell you his hand ... man it's capable,
he can level a porch with it too!
So ... if in fact, you ever feel he smarts you ...
and-were-you to-dare, I don't know ...
so again, I'll tell you, a good old boy I like him as I know him ...
before you get to jumping, friend maybe you-should too!
Because if the truth be known friend,
I'll be honest with you ... I haven't a clue,
but sure still ... I will bet you this ...
I'm still learning, don't know what else he can do!
"Was working with him shredding wood breaking bread ... again ...
like yesterday just today myself,
and through the compassion of his hand,
I figure I know now ... "he's a good man that Adam"!
I'm blessed, to have him as my friend.
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DeadUntilDark
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I really liked the form of this..
and how it flows,
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Lol reminds me of an Adam I used to know actually. That guy was whacky but sure was fun to be around.
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awww hot cute. And no you don't have to do anything differently. I'm sure whoever this person is was very greatful to have something so wonderful written about him.
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Option please. (You have it in so many contests I can't tell what's for what.)
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Lmao. Mad, but most of these in my contest are. What's with the characters and number entries being so whacky and funny, I don't want to get a stich lol.
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"he's a good man that Adam"!
I'm blessed to have him as my friend.
I think I like this Adam too. lol This was very charming, the effervescent and unflagging optimism of the central character reminds me of my Uncle...he too is very much a cheerful and happy fellow.
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A lovely poem of friendhip. A pleasure to read this morning. Thank you for sharing. Take care. Blessings to you. Sandy
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its a lovely story about a lovely person, but just not quite my "cup of tea" butthanks for entering
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may i use this 1
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great job, keep it up
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Simply wonderful
Great job and best wishes
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Thanks for sharing your new friend with me James. I now feel like I know him as well.
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I would have changed nothing at all ...
for this poem is so very YOU. Well done, James.
Love
Myra
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L8, straight
I like the simple diction and upbeat tone, but I feel like it needs more of a progression. Its a long poem, and I would reccomend trying to find a way to draw the reader through it. Something along the lines of a sequential narrative, or a change in tone, an unexpected attribute to be explained, etc -
Adam does sound like a good man, the kind I'd like to shake hands with. A common guy, they are rare enough these days...interesting that the guys we call common, the hard working, honest, matter-of-fact guys are pretty rare. I'd like to think myself one, but that isn't fr me to say. Others must judge that.
Thanks, I enjoyed this quite a bit. It's not everyday I read a poem that make me shake my head in agreement.
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A very interesting piece. I clicked on the poem at first because it is about someone with my same name, but it has caused me to reread it, and study what is being said here. It is a very real piece, and I like that a lot. It is refreshing to see someone writing free and descriptive. Very good. -
It has been awhile since I've been able to pop round to read your works; & reading this makes me regret that
Very well penned, I love the narrative feel to it, as though you are telling me over a cuppa - Great
Best of Luck in the Contest
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Gave me the idea of the man in the mirror, how we see ourselves,, perceive ourselves...awesome write. Blessings.
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