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Lifeless

Missing image

i am but a weathered stump
years of nil emotions
has left me dark and dry
luscious green grass
blown away by your
vicious words and lies
there was a time
when i thought
in battered weather
we could survive
sadly mistaken
you screwed the life
from me back then
draining my veins
inch by inch

i struggled back

bringing blood

flowing again

another dark storm

leaves me shattered

unable to recover

from the last hard blow


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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 2

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    Very sad and full of deep thoughts and emotions
    thank you for entering this write and best wishes
    Julie


  • Desire gold member
    May 26

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    Oh My Word~

    Wow! this had me balling like a baby Powerful emotions also energy weaved here and it certainly tugged hard at my Heartstrings
    Excellent verse penned~ the message grabs with might
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • DolceVito gold member
    May 25

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    Awesome...This too shall pass, love, that's what my mother always said...Nicely done


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 25

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    oohh sweetie

    this is seriously sad..i hate to see you in pain, don't know what to say that would help..i can say that you penned an excellent piece..


  • Daizee silver member
    May 25

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    ..and on we go

    It's then we realize how strong we really are. Well done on this. Those emotions aren't always easy to find the words for. You described it in such a way that is beautifully heart wrenching.

    S. xo


  • maralisa silver member
    May 25

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    aw a wonderful write for the image promt G good luck nthe contestM


  • Cup-a-Joe
    May 25
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  • retribusive
    May 25

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    Sooo this is basically perfect. My ex (who I got rid of tonight actually... not the best of nights) recently cheated on me... twice. It hurts, definitely. Great write, I love the metaphor.


  • Cannonsfire
    May 25

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    Strong powerful words here girlfriend, know how this needs courage to obtain C

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