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Above the Rocky Shore

Standing on the cliff
Above the rocky shore
Watching as the tides roll in
Splasing on the depths below

Watching you sit with a woman
Underneath our favorite tree
The sunlight gracing her face
You both look very happy
You've gotten over me I see

And I feel a twinge of hurt and betrayl
As you watch the birds fly high
While I stand alone, upon the cliff
Above the rocky shore

A contest entry

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  • Tqop
    May 25

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    A thousand applauds:

    Awe...how sad. It grabbed my emotions. I loved this poem. I really love how it started off, and I loved how it grabbed my attention. The ending was spactacular.

    Love,
    Evemauy


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 24

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    This is a lovely write; I really enjoyed your imagery and emotion
    Thankyou for entering, and good luck!

    Maria