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My Personal Shade

Standing proud and tall,
the adolescent tree draped my face
in its slivers of shade.

 

Somehow, a silence

still weighed heavy,

even with my little ones

running wild with innocent abandon.

 

Making instant friends,

with a simple:

 

“Hi, what’s your name?” 

My smile forget my eyes
because this damn park bench
seems to be shrinking!

 

~

 

Thank goodness,

fantasy finds you

traveling in, around,

 

and through.

 

For reasons avoided,
I continue... uncomfortable ~ 

under dappled shadows
 

unsuccessfully watching,

while wishing us the moments

poised most improper...

 

 

again tomorrow.

 

 

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  • Aalta silver member
    June 20

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    the flow and simplicity of the words are awesome....
    beautiful expression, beautiful array of images.... and great emotions
    superb!!

    Thanks for sharing, I Love IT!!!!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 19

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    "under dappled shadows..."
    oooooh, I like that Thank you so very much for your time and your talent. Love, Lane


  • DeJaBlue
    June 4

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    That second stanza really grabbed my heart...I have felt that many times.. like joy just seems to elude you, even in the midst of so much happiness. Amazing job.


  • Daizee silver member
    May 31

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    Isn't it funny how we can manage to be lost in ourselves with sometimes even the most chaotic things going on around us. I love the reflective quality to this. I've done the same thing you've described.

    Love,
    Stacy

  • This is beautiful, it truly is.

    Tony

  • a good poem, ah as we get older the whole world starts shrinking and too with technology - the bench is resized by precision cut sighs. when young we see not the world for what it is but raom fantasy lands and smile at strangers as small as we.

  • It is always beautiful in the fantasy because there - it is always perfect.

    This poem is filled with sad longing and wishing for what one thinks they might have found. As always, a wonderful write beauty. ~Pamela


  • sheltered
    May 25

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    nice consonance and internal rhyme and
    "dappled shadows" yes, they are the best kind
    tight write


  • Desire gold member
    May 25

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    You Just Go On!!

    Oh My Word Hot One You have penned this with Power Yep!!
    I kept reading this over again
    Love the presentation also the way the words have You hanging- wanting more
    Excellent!! Woot

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 25

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    stunning

    amazingly detailed and engaging, loved the imagery..a strong shiny possibility in this one my friend!

  • excellent

    You have taken this prompt to new heights...
    Beautiful imagery throughout..........
    Love the first stanza
    Perfect from beginning to end
    Best of luck in the contest
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

  • It is a wonder where the mind goes and how those flights of fantasy can sustain us in the everyday.

    great job lovely lady

  • Damn nice shade too.

  • Can picture this with your fine words here C

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