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Emily Grace

You’re my words and, my pause.
You’re my words, the place where all meaning lies;
 when you ink yourself onto pages you make yourself eternal.
I exhale you as I dream and you’re my inspiration.
You spiral yourself around the nuclei of my thoughts
and we’ll be together always because atoms cannot be split.

Take these words like water and let them sustain
Let them touch something so raw
We can only twist ourselves around the feeling and hold on;
Let it carry us over tides and rend itself in a great storm.

When we’re together, I will fall through you.
It’s coming sooner than you can imagine
Because I’m wishing for time to hurry.
I trust that it will touch you right at the heart,
And then you’ll know how much I love you.


I want to show you how beautiful you make me see things.
I can give you a world where every daisy’s petal is love.
Where the moon, is a full round promise of stars tumbling
lacy skies and the sun glows from your eyes.


I’ll teach you to let light bubble your heart,
Soar your veins beyond the leafy shadows of mind,
Because that is what you’ve given to me,
That is what you’ve taught me.
You’ll be my miracle.

Author notes

We're separated for seven months out of the year.

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  • This girl sure is lucky. Any girl would kill for such an intricate, beautiful poem. I know I would. Beautiful.

  • celadia
    June 11

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    this has a prose feel to it that makes it strong in my opinion, you've said what you wanted, the only thing, I'd like to know more about the person being written about.


  • aanika
    June 6

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    this is soooo sweet.

    the last line made me smile.
    i really like the way it related to the song; it made me feel exactly like the song sounds.

    thanks for entering. <3


    • ARTvs.WAR
      June 6
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      The corniness was there completely haha. But the song has some humor in it that's just great "Shook a turd out of the bottom of your pants" :]


  • E Grace
    June 1
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    this girl really must be something!


    • ARTvs.WAR
      June 1
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      something doesn't quite give it justice, everything*


      • E Grace
        June 1
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        oh wow, why are you on right now? isn't the show at like 5?

        • ARTvs.WAR
          June 1
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          we've already had this conversation, sore throat = bed. but i'm actually in the lounge room hanging out with a bunch of eager groupies ;]


          • E Grace
            June 1
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            you don't worry me! i got you, i know i do, and you'll never get away.

            • ARTvs.WAR
              June 1
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              your confidence will get the best of you one day, but I won't be the one to take advantage. anyway call me, it's stupid talk on this thing.

              • E Grace
                June 1
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                "its stupid talk on this thing." (caveman) im not calling, you have a sore throat and if i was there youd have a big bowl of tomato soup!


                • ARTvs.WAR
                  June 1
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                  i'm going to watch matt cover for me, this should be fun :].
                  talk to you tonight? or tomorrow?


                  • E Grace
                    June 1
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                    ew, matt is playing for you tonight? HA.. HA.. he fails. love you!

  • wow

    It's really easy to tell that you didnt just write this becuase you wanted to make her feel good, you wrote this becuase you really love her.

  • !&%$&$!!

    see, you've gone so far beyond English superlatives I had to invent my own. This is so beautiful. She's a lucky girl.

    --d. ♥

  • Absolutely beautiful ...


    You've expressed yourself so simply yet in a way the reader gets caught up in the web of romance and dangles with the words floating around them - fabulous.


    Stay safe
    ~Manda

  • Wow

    wow. you're amazing. love ur poem, it's really beautiful.

  • luv2dream gold member
    May 24

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    "I exhale you as I dream and you’re my inspiration.
    You spiral yourself around the nuclei of my thoughts
    and we’ll be together always because atoms cannot be split."...love those lines best i think. I understand being apart that length of time from the one you love. i'm trying to resolve that issue here.

    • ARTvs.WAR
      May 24
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      It's not hard until I go through airport security and that first text message comes through saying "This run is going to take a lot out of me." That's when it hits me like a ton of bricks. I'm home for another month now so I'd rather not think about it :]

      Thanks for the comment, I really appreciate it :]]


  • Antebellum
    May 24
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    awe this is so sweet.
    It's an amazing feeling...love, I mean.

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