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Torture

Veins bursting
blood splattered
panic stricken eyes
your blood oozing
mystic rivers of red
pain and hatred leak away
tense body
knife glides in
cut your organs
slice and dice baby
lick the blade
grab your hair
smash in your face
bloody. Unrecognisable.
Eyes crying, tears falling
blood dripping, oozing
your life drains away
slowly
Now your alone
    dying.
         crying.
Darling your pleas mean nothing.

Now your rid of you're sins, you're

.Empty.

      .Broken.

            .Lifeless.

                 .Gone.

A contest entry

Let me know what you think, honestly! it's not that great, but i'd love feedback. Thanks,.

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  • l o v e b u r s t
    July 7

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    Very Creepy. like the way you put the words together.
    "dying.
    crying.
    .Empty.
    .Broken.
    .Lifeless.
    .Gone."

    Thank you for entering my contest