The hand of time was stitching
A garment just for me
A finger so bewitching
Embroidered silently.
Quite deftly it kept sowing
Not making any seams
The dress whilst slowly growing
Created many dreams.
Upon it was a pocket
To carry many things
A tiny silver locket
That held an Angel's wings
Those wings were made for flying
As moments often do
A second hand supplying
A pot of magic glue.
At last the dress was finished
I had to wonder why
The years had not diminished
As I began to fly.
The hand had been creating
A moment just for me
For whilst my mind was waiting
My soul had been set free.
A contest entry
- B-WOW....Best Write of the Week..with Starz of Heaven, aboomer, and islekine by islekine.
700 points, ended May 29, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Great...
Great singing, beautiful poetic voice; simbolism is outstanding, the rhythm is great, and the imagery shows a sublime picture.
Much gratitude to the author of "Timeless".
In respect and admiration
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Lovely! As usual from you, unique wording, flawless flow - very well done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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This is another great write for this contest this will be a hard one to judge thanks for taking the time to enter be well.
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You never cease to amaze me!
This is so very well penned! Rhyme and rhythm ...
and the imagery and message are great! Very creative write...Tanks so much for sharing your talent again!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
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I had to read this a few times over,
it was simply beautiful darling,
and i hope to read more of your work soon
I mean this just blew me away!
i was in complete awe the first time I finished(:
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Thankyou for your comments.So pleased you enjoyed the poem so much, Ros
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Beautiful poem. It flows so well, like a dress in the wind. The diction is great and for lack of a better word, dreamy, which I think fits the tone. By the way, perfect tone for this theme.
The poem really does describe the indescribable title. I love the simple rhyme and I am not a fan of rhyme. But that is because it usually seems that people lose the meaning of their poem trying to make it rhyme but you did not do that at all. It seems very well thought out and not pressured to rhyme at all. Amazing job.
This was lovely to read keep it up!! -
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Thankyou for your lovely comments, Ros
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Excellent
This was definitely a lovely write. Timelesness, that waits for no one, and is frever eternal. At last the dress was finished, and I had to wonder why the Years had not diminished. how come it should still be at the hand were it was when the sewing began. see troubled mind and soul, as all had been accomplished to your favour.
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many thanks for your very interesting critique
, Ros
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Well, hell
Just when I had convinced myself that the island was devoid of merit, just taking up valuable shoreline property on the Atlantic and North Sea, you go and write this.
Where do I put my ire now, luv? It's all your fault.
Oh- I may mention that I'm keeping this one. See you in court counseler.
G
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I love this Ros, it has a lightness but a purpose to it as well, this cheered me up and maybe I'll give the flying thing a try
Sue
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Yes, I have a spare pair of wings just for you
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Beautiful. I loved the opener and ending: both so mysterious.
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Thankyou so much for taking the time to comment
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Quite delicious and stitching/bewitching is definitely my rhyme of the week
Great stuff
Jeff
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Glad you enjoyed
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Warm and wonderful
A lovely picture told in beautiful rhyme. Very well done.
Chris
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Thankyou Chris
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