They say my life is a game,
But I know it's sometimes a hunt.
I send your self-deprecating child home
Crying every day, and you can
Go ahead and tell her it's
Because I have low self-esteem.
Deep down, you tell her, I don't feel good about myself.
So I shit on her to feel all better.
Lies!
I am a self-confident bitch.
I know I'm better than most people.
I have flawless nondescript clothes,
Glossy hair, and a new best friend
Every six months.
I'm sixteen, but I've fucked
In hundreds of positions.
Nothing stands out about me,
Except my beauty.
I don't taunt your child
Because I have low self-esteem.
I taunt her to look cool,
Because that's what I am.
You can call me cold-hearted,
But you'd do the same
If you had half my power.
Author notes
Just so everyone knows: THIS IS NOT WRITTEN FROM MY PERSPECTIVE. When I was in high school, I was the antithesis of this poem. Trust me.
Please tell me what you think
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Well done!
Amber
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ooohhh
your very cold hearted whoever u are.
must have been the observer because you could not have been the person teasing with this point of view, they are self serving people and not introspective and retroactive. -
Great write. It's well written and it brings to light things I don't think people realize. Wonderful job.
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Very well-written
I think this is a great poem as a whole. I like the short sentences and blunt diction, and the somewhat off-kilter metre. I'm not sure specifically why it works to the poem's advantage, but somehow it compliments the subject matter.
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o god i love it. i went to a very rich high school back in the day and this sounds like every girl i went to high school with it is so sad that in our common day society our female youths are taught and encourage more and more to value label and looks onstead of having self confidence and knowledge. it makes me so sad but your poem is fantastic
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great
ha well i see you like playing roles good job.
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Wow, I really love this poem... there are parts I can really relate to, and parts (like you) I was definitely the antithesis of... a great write, my friend; keep up the amazing work
Maria
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First off, great choice of subject and great job with delivery. As I reader I can just feel the sarcastic and cynical vibe straight from the get go, and as I read on and on into the piece, the feeling just gets stronger and stronger.
Great use of mechanics as well - rhyme scheme, rhythm, its all there and well placed. Amazing poem. I like this alot. Excellent portrayal of the general "head in the clouds" attitude that so many of these little *insert explicitive here* express.
Once again, great write.
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I like it
I really love the way you describe how the agressor justifies her actions by saying that everyone would do it, so why blame her?
Great write -
I LOVE IT
wow
what a bitch
hahah
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Wow, this poem was very true. I see this happen everyday. Cliques are horrbile at my school and it's really sad to see people get taunted. Heck, it even happens to me sometimes. It's ridiculous!
Great poem. Enter it in a contest.
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