Do they know. Are they aware,
of that pain i feel and the despair
another drink, to dull the pain
my life's become the ball and chain.
I muster on with talent and skill
Alcohol being my only thrill.
I smile at you, a gleam in my eye,
another drink to hide the tears i want to cry.
This friend of mine, so sturdy and strong
never fails me. Does no wrong.
Gets me through when i need a lift,
Malt Whiskey being the most perfect gift.
When your desperate and on the brink,
You promise yourself just one drink,
which then turns into two, three, and four
before you know it you're on the floor.
Out-cold, happy and blissfully unaware
it's your loved ones that really get the scare.
Bitter and resentful but they'll never give in
believing this battle you will win.
Families though, are the ties that bind
but slowly and sadly mine start to unwind.
I push them away for another drink
and their hopes for me start to sink.
I hid it so well, twas the perfect game.
To me alcohol was never to blame
for the failures and misfortunes that came my way
with a drink in my hand i kept them at bay.
Drunk and deluded i was the "best mum"
We'd make cakes together while i downed more rum
When you were little we'd laugh and play.
But then you'd say "Mummy please don't drink today"
Destroyed you're childhood and let you down
I'm sorry Darling that i wasn't around.
When I am better, can we please make amends
So i can start to be your mother and maybe your friend.
Author notes
Oh noes!
A contest entry
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Comments
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Oh wow. This was intense. But absolutely beautiful.
The rhyme was eh at first, but then it clicked real well and kept flowing for the rest of the poem. I hardly even noticed it after that. Excellent.
When your desperate and on the brink,
You promise yourself just one drink,
which then turns into two, three, and four
before you know it you're on the floor.
I liked this stanza. Just because of it's truth. It's always just one, then it turns to so many you can't even remember what happened the next day. This is also where your rhyme started to pick up well. Good job.
Drunk and deluded i was the "best mum"
We'd make cakes together while i downed more rum
When you were little we'd laugh and play.
But then you'd say "Mummy please don't drink today"
^^ my favorite lines. The last line of this stanza just blew my heart away. I loved it. Addiction is so bad, and it hurts so many people that we love. You have captured this hurt and these emotions so well. Great job.
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest. :]
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Drunk and deluded i was the "best mum"
We'd make cakes together while i downed more rum
When you were little we'd laugh and play.
But then you'd say "Mummy please don't drink today"
Destroyed you're childhood and let you down
I'm sorry Darling that i wasn't around.
When I am better, can we please make amends
So i can start to be your mother and maybe your friend."
So often we hurt the ones we love the most by an addiction. Whether it is alcohol or drugs cigarettes, cutting or what ever vice we have there is still the element of hurting someone. Thank you for sharing this.
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