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coroner delema

Another teen wasted.
Blood in the tub cuts on the arms.
a sorry note to a family that ignored her.
Raped and pregnant.
Society's lot.

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Prompt: Crimson Statistics 25 words.

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  • Cyanide Dreams
    May 23

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    This was pretty good. However, I felt that this was more tell than show. I want to feel the emotions. The last line was really good, oh, how many people lose life over an ignoring and ignorant family. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


    • patsoldcat
      May 23
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      thanks

      i am sorry you do not think it was a feeling poem it was direct to the problem we have in america and i used only 25 words. if i used 13 lines i would have been more discriptive.

      thanks and blessings always.