perhaps I'm your flame-woman,
the yin in all your
yellow evenings;
a campfire in our backyard
that burns and boils
your body of water
till fire is a black distance on
steam's shimmering clarity
I am spark in
every wet stone. You are
stone before wetness. together
we are a piano piece, crazily different
in each hand
and perhaps
the bacon and eggs
we ourselves wake to
on Atwood's morning in the burned house
A contest entry
- When Margaret Speaks by Annalise.
3000 points, ended June 11, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful!!
I look forward to reading more of your awesome work, Poet!! 
Peace,
Cyn
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I didn't comment this! This poem had a beautiful sensual vibe to it, classical and very happy feeling. 'stone before wetness' makes me think of the dew in the morning, almost to sunrise but not quite there. That third stanza is very much my favorite.
Somehow, your writing makes me feel very very calm.
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How many times can I say very in one comment?
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haha thank you VERY much =P
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haha thank you VERY much =P
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I am spark in
every wet stone. You are
stone before wetness. together
we are a piano piece, crazily different
in each hand
lines to relish long after reading Namitha
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this is really, really, really, really, freakin' good. you rock little lady. i love the piano piece metaphor and how you extended it. miss you.
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sounds lovely... beautiful write.
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I love the whole stone/piano thing you have going here. Just works, ya know?
That last stanza really hit the spot.
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Perfect.
I think you ought to walk a way with the award sweep on this one.
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Beautiful as ever.
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hi nami
hey nami, wazz up? i made a new account as i forgot my old one's password. so pls check out my poems and keep in contact. bye, i love u -
beautiful
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You truly are "spark in every wet stone", Poet. Every poem I read of yours are always impressive & tenderly penned. A worthy answer to a wondrous prompt. Good luck in Meli's contest.
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Excellent.
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loved the piano & hands metaphor here - stunning! And so very wonderful to see you writing again... I missed your beautiful and unique poetry! You have such a mature voice and this poem again emphasizes that.
~ Nicolette
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Just smiles and is glad to read you again C
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