Distance
closed so slowly
as you entered my life,
trusting, loving, accepting you
hoping, finally, my dreams were answered.
Feelings shattered, heart broken-
Silent, you walk away,
widening the
distance.
Author notes
Distance...
In a list
A contest entry
- Rictameter w/options by piccola.
900 points, ended May 25, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Give it to me straight....
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I can see why this took a gold trophy
not only is the form done correctly but
there is a lot of power in the wording
congrats on your win!
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Thank you so much for your kind comment.
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oh my
with utter perfection you capture this emotion...
the grace you cary the reader along with in this little powerhouse is only matched by it's depth..
straight enough 4 ya? thats why it won gold
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Thank you so much for your sweet comment, I am glad you enjoyed it
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I love this. thank you for entering. Good job in all ways.
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Thank you so much for hosting such a wonderful contest. The gold is much appreciated.
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beautifully penned
sadly the pictured painted.. p.s. i love your homepage background! it's eye appealing..
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment.
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Being brought up in the old fashioned school of rhyme, I sometimes find any other sort of style hard to understand but this is lovely to look at and has such feeling in a few words that most of us have been through. I am no expect at all but I like this very much. Sheila
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I like to try new styles, and after the first one of these I wrote, I was hooked, lol.
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Very nice poetress!! Short and strait to the heart, well done!
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I think you did a wonderful job with this! You nailed the form and captured the emotions perfectly. Great write!
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Thank you so much, I had my doubts, lol.
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I've written a couple myself and I think you did great!
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This is a nice Rict. very good job best to you in the contest have a great weekend best to you always be well.
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Thank you.
I can't help but think it would have been better than this if my kids would have left me alone, lol.
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Beautiful form here...yep the list sums up the poem's content....soft and sad C
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Thank you so much, Chez.
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This is an exellent piece of poetry, splendid in form.
So sad, thanks for sharing your poem,
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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Thank you so much, Tony.
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Nicely penned. Take care. Tom
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Thank you.
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Beautifully put together. You are a clever poet.
Blessings Di
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Eh...I tried.
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