Lost be my heart to the sea,
Lost with Neptune's treasures.
Bring me back not to sandy lands,
Barren of life and souls in big measures.
Hath thee seen my heartache,
Reaching out to ye?
Sweet ride and great thrill,
Be the waves rolling ever free.
Should I drown in it's cold depths,
I will live with the hands of the coral reef.
Lead me, my friend back home.
My crew be hearty with golden teeth.
My friends be the dolphins,
The sun be my guide.
Back home to the ocean,
With my heart and my galant ship, my pride.
Away I go,
Returned to the call.
Theiving be my survival,
Until the waters shall fall.
Author notes
Though my original goal was too deliver a comical experience through a drunken pirate's perspective, my emotional side quickly took over and brought forth the inspiration needed to write the preceding poem.
Written March 13th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love the 'Pirate speak' throughout your poem - it added depth to the characters and made the story more realistic. A great entry and thank you
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I like this. Maybe it is just me, but the meter didn't seem to be steady, but the rhymes were good and so were the visuals. Good luck in the contest.
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A very good write here stong and unusual use of olde english which we don't see much of nowadays. Good Luck
Lakota x -
wonderful!!...expressive and full of great imagery!!...nicely done indeed!...good luck in the contest!..hugs..leanne xx
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A stunning write and good entry. Very special imagery here! Thank you for entering..!! Welcome to AllPoetry
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amazing
I love pirate poems. This was really good. My husband thinks he is a pirate most of the time. I have written a couple of pirate poems. He begs for them. I am going to show him this. I know he will enjoy it.
Queen
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I really loved this...It was especially cool to me 'cause I've always wanted to be a pirate! lol....anyways....great job...
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excellent. i agree with the others, this poem flows very well. its so descriptive, i can almost sense the unease; i can feel the water hitting my face. I really hope you do well in this contest
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very well written. i can see a pirate standing on the tip of his ship proclaiming
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Ohhhh to see inside a pirate's soul ...
I believe they probably are, just as you have
written of them here. They've got those feelings
and emotions, that oft' mislead people by their actions.
This was quite an enjoyable write! You've got some good
meter going into this write, and you've done an excellent
job with the rhyming!
GOOD LUCK WITH THE CONTEST!!
Keep writing!
~Aimee
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This is a very good poem. The feeling and sentiment are excellent and the words weave a wonderful read. It is sad, yet beautiful.
Thank you for entering this
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Fleshmaker~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good peice of work. It was nicely written and it had a good flow. Keep writing, and thank you for sharing this with us. Also thank you for commenting on my poem titled "Not tile yet".
~!~Manda~!~
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