Shield your thoughts
Burry your emotions
Deaden your breathing
Hide behind vacant eyes
Behind the empty stares
Lies a battle field
Pain, torture, torment
Destruction
Slowly breaking on the inside
Fighting to keep it in
Fading on the outside
Hide behind vacant eyes
-- There are times when defense fails… and the tears will fall --
thoughts...
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Am i reading it backwards, is this the 1st of 'vacant eyes' or the 2nd?
either way- agony was screaming underneath the blunt, brutal honesty of this piece. brilliantly crafted. keep it up. - T
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great job, loved it
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loved it...former..self-proclaimed..."bottler" myself...
until the Gluttons for Punishment got ahold of me
and made me pierce every bloody word out
including the ones I most feared!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
(a lovely twist...there are times when offense fails
and the only defense is our lovely cleansing tears)
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I like the battlefield/shield imagery you've used. The final line "-- There are times when defense fails… and the tears will fall --" keeps the write strong all the way to the end and is a nice closure. There's a typo in "bury" in the second line, but otherwise, I wouldn't change anything. Thanks for sharing!
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I Love Your Work
Deep Dark & DepressingAmazing
Thanks for Sharing
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