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when I'm gone.

do you remeber the time i was with you.
Or the time you took care of me when i had the flu.
If you just new how much i love you.
I should have told you but now my words are long-overdue.

When i left you to be.
You strongly disagree.
This depended on my future and my degree.
they will be great things to foresee.

I might not been the best.
You were there and i was blessed.
All you have thaught me, i have progressed.
you will always be my first request.

So i dont want not a tear.
Even when i desaper.
there's many things to fear.
I will be okey you just takecare.

















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  • this so lucid and deep....there are two spelling mistakes...its knew and dissappear...d second one might be coz u tried rhyming the spellings too...if its so...nice creativity...well done!