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whines

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setting sun
a mosquito whines
in my ear
 
 
 
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  • AngelBellerose gold member
    June 1

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    the feeling you share
    is something real
    and penned to the point
    of something shared
    awesome Hugs Angel♥


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 23

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    Ahhh yes, a very familiar sound...they seem to think I am on the menu, the blue plate special... enjoyed...PK


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    May 22
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    SMACK!!!

    Got 'im!!! Uhm... you might have a hand print on that side of your face for a while... *spritzes bug spray all around*... pesky lil buggers.


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    May 22

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    Brought a smile to my face :-) Lovely imagery, use of the sense of sound and sight...quite an image here of something as magnanimous in size as the sun when contrasted with something as tiny as a moquito! I like how you brought Mother Nature so down to earth to your ear. Lovely haiku as always from the best haijin ever! Wonderful alliteration in L1. Well balanced and nicely laid out haiku with L2 being the longest line.

    Keep 'em coming...
    Warm regards from sunny Pune,
    Charishma

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 22
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      Thanks so much Char. I'm not sure I'm the best haijin ever but it's a compliment I'll cherish forever!!! Thank you. Hope things are well with you. Take care always... big hug to you in India!


  • Haiku Kin
    May 22

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    That time of year, isn't it? Nicely done! Now, excuse me while I go get the swatter...


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 22

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    oh my the little buggers never miss a trick, don'tch love them, thanks for sharing this summery piece with us
    Linda


    • haikumonk gold member
      May 22
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      Hi Linda... thanks so much for coming by to comment. Very much appreciated.

  • Bjarne gold member
    May 22

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    Great Don!

    Hope you have a wonderful, renewing spring, likewise, I hope those little critters stay around to remind us that they are prey for the wonderful avians and flying mammals!  Pesky, yes, sometimes deadly as with most everything in nature, including us!

    I appreciate your work immensely!
    bj

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 22
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      Thanks BJ... I appreciate your great comment. I love Spring and at 62 years old, it remains my favorite time of year. Take care and thanks again.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 22

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    Hm, it's time for them to come around, unfortunately enough!
    That is when I slap my own face again and again in the night, never hit the mosquito though


    • haikumonk gold member
      May 22

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      Hello.... hey, it's great seeing you. Thanks for coming by. And, stop hitting yourself in the face... LOLL

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