Rose petals fall to the ground,
soft as silk,
smooth as water,
calm to the touch,
and delicate as a 13 year old's heart.
A girl stands on the side lines,
alone.
Wishing this were not so.
She stares at the petals,
Hoping that someday,
she could have not a care in the world.
Just like them.
This girl,
delicate as those petals,
wears a false smile,
to suit others,
who would worry
too much.
Her mask falls,
as soon as she's away,
and she shows the broken little girl inside,
who she truly is.
She’s just like a rose petal,
crushed ,
after being stepped on.
This girl,
she wishes she could show the truth,
not have to hide behind a mask,
and lighten her burden,
that's pounding her into the ground,
until only her fake smile
is showing.
Rose petals,
soft as silk,
smooth as water,
calm to the touch,
and delicate as a 13 year olds heart.
And a girl,
who stands alone,
and feigns a happy face,
when really,
she is
CRUSHED.
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By N e a r B l u e P o e t r y
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This is a wonderful poem. You've expressed your feelings very well. Very nicely written!
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Aw.. poor you. I feel the exact same way. Hope Lady Fate will favor you in the soon future.
This was a lovely metaphor and poem. Good luck in the contest.
Claire -
Hm.. I love this. I instantly loved the metaphor about the roses, the description of them and then the surprise of having it be compared to a heart.
It's so sad, it reminds me of myself a little and the little rose petal being crushed is sad but I think she can rise again.
My favorite lines are the first stanza and last, just beautiful.
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Are all little children like flowers? Radiant beauty youth and innocince but some times when they are alone they are just as fragile as a dandilion. One gust of wind, one breathe and it's all gone. Make sure to kep your petals close, as the saying goes:
Keep your friends close but your enamies closer.
We all need a mask, poetry is mine and still some people see behind it. This is elegant and beautiful keep up the work.
Best of luck,
Goreck -
"A girl stands on the side lines,
alone.
Wishing this were not so.
She stares at the petals,
Hoping that someday,
she could have not a care in the world.
Just like them."
wow.
this is amazing...sad, but beautiful.
wonderful imagery.
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Beautiful! I love this. Im inspired by it
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Holy frigging Cheerios... this poem is awesome... Was this inspired by the title I Never Promised you a Rose Garden? Not the book itself, but the title? That's sort of what it reminds me of... If she hasn't already, you should have Joseph read this- I've had her read some of my stuff before and she can give you really good feedback... -
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re:Crushed Comment
Thanks. And do you know whats ironic? i just ate some cheerios!! lol. yeah. It was inspired by the title(: and I'm afraid of what mrs. Joseph will say! (jk. i just havent had the time to bring it in(
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a good poem, and I really liked how you have crafted it - although I would consider placing it on a different background so that the text is more easily viewed - but other than that this had some beautiful images!
Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!
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Aaaawwwwwwwww
i love this!
so beautifully sad
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