a man once said to me 'That all is living and nothing is dead
and all thoughts are the same mind
and they flow everywhere and not trapped in your head
and that space is nothing but the reflection of time
He said life forms are different and assorted because that was the creators rhyme
I thought about all that he said for quite awhile it seemed
and then i awoke into another dream
Because we never wake up because we're always waking up
Author notes
I know this is short but it feels right, i might retune it later but for now i'm riding in on me little pony
A contest entry
- B-WOW...Best Write of the Week, with aboomer, Starz of Heaven and islekine by islekine.
700 points, ended May 22, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I also like this needs some line breaks and more structure and a bit of better flow but not a bad start thanks for entering our contest be well.
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I like the wording and depth in what you have so far. Needs a bit of tweaking, shorten some lines, take out some filler words - but I think this has great possibilities..
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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I like this...as a start...
But you have a couple of typos and the format is all over the place...But as I said...I like where this is going...
edit a bit...and you'll have a real winner!
Best wishes in the contest and always! Write on!
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