Lord, I was once a young child, at that time I knew
how to put my devotion and trust onto You.
But in my desperation my faith lost its core,
as it hid from the surface of my mind I swore:
"I cannot, I shall not, I will not believe,
unless there's a sign for me to receive.
I want You to tell me, in words, You are here
I need You to show me You care".
I sat by my window, as tears filled my eyes.
So caught up in thoughts of a world filled with lies,
when a beautiful wagtail knocked with her beak
on the window: "Oh that is the sign that I seek!"
She took a step back and forth by my side,
and I held on to Your love as I dropped my pride.
From that day on I never had doubts in my mind,
I know that You see all, although I am blind.
I trust that Your love will carry me through
and I hold on to my devotion for You.
You answer my prayers by the signs that You send.
You lead me along for my soul to transcend.
But you won't help me out unless you hear my prayer,
because to humanity's free will You swear.
And I can't hear Your voice in the midst of my words,
and that's why You send me Your message through birds.
And if I am to know that my prayers are met;
I sit in deep silence and know not to fret.
I know just to put my trust onto you
and to ask for what's best, in Your point of view.
If I carry my life, share my love with all,
I know that You'll always answer my call.
A contest entry
- Big Points -- "Thankfulness in a Healing Prayer" by BuriedTreasures.
17000 points, ended May 22, 17 entries
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nice poem
First stanza "Here" and "Care" do not rhyme. line seven, Eleven syllabels, line eight,eight syllables is this deliberate, permissable in this poetic form? otherwise this is quite a lovely poem George
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This is a beautiful composition, well versed & structured--
Well Done!
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This is a beautiful, inspired piece, and a joy to read.
The contest is judged partially based on spelling so I would be remissed if I did not point out the single spelling error I noticed "always" in the last line. Easy enough to fix.
Best of luck in the contest with this piece!!
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Thank you very much for the spellcheck, I tend to mix Norwegian and English spelling rules sometimes...
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I guess not knowing too many languages sometimes has its advantages. (Or so I'll try to convince myself.)
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Very good.
I love the message. Few parts of it were hard to read, but mostly just small words here and there. The last two lines are powerful. Good job.
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