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Inaction

The stars mock me as another day sleeps
Twinkling with bitter commentary
So many plans for a better start
But the sun left me early

Each step faltered by unyielding gravity 
As the turning earth changes direction
Stopping my progress bitterly
To wallow in rejection

Spinning in motionless uncertainty
Ever closer to goals at hand
Time moves so very quickly
Until light leaves the land


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  • bluewho
    June 18

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    This fits the prompt very well. Leaves you with a sense of empty sadness and regret. Great flow.
    Well deserved gold!


  • cheaphotelsign
    June 17

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    very good...yeah, i like this one...flow is flawless...some fantastic images...i almost dont know what to say..lol thank you for this entry and best wishes


    • Harmesmur
      June 19

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      Thank you so very much. It was your great prompt and I appreciate the opportunity


  • kristian 28
    June 8

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    i like this one,sounds emotional and raw,like raw emotions,you can check out some of mine ,i think you ĺ find them interesting

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