lightning bug liasons

seventeen holes poked
precariously in the lid
of a cracked mason jar
to prevent carbon monoxide death

blinking amarillo
casting shadows against
star-lit reality

slowing time with sluggish

beats of wings

dew scented sun rays

creeped into the iris of your eyes

coaxing subconscious notions

of freedom to enthusiastic fingers

metal tinging against glass

[melancholy]

as you let them go

Author notes

prompt; "I was your star. But the moment you set sight of the sea, I knew it was over. You touched her." by me ~perfectsunset~

amarillo ~ yellow.

A contest entry

Overnight Quickie =] by perfectsunset. 625 points, ended May 21, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

running from lions never seemed like such a mistake.

Comments

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white stone
May 21

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You rock the firefly casbah, still.she, I love it, and the presentation is perfection. Very creative take on the prompt.
perfectsunset
May 21

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Wow what beautiful use of
language you crafted for this
prompt. I love the visuals
and your creative ideas.

Wonderfully done!

Best of luck & thanks for entering
JinSays
May 21

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oh, I dunno-I really like this alot. I love the word amarillo, being from Texas.

dew scented sun rays
creeped into the iris of your eyes
coaxing subconscious notions
of freedom to enthusiastic fingers

Nice. I wish you all the best.
Love,
jin
Alitare
May 21

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I enjoyed your utilization of simplistic, yet provokingly deep imagery for context. May you do well, friend.