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“Passion and Love”

Underneath I lay
Holding her closer to me
As she makes her way
Into ecstasy.
Her skin touching mine
Making my center wet
And wanting for her attention
As she slides her fingers
Down my breast,
Across my stomach
Making me shiver under her touch,
To my wet center.
Through out the night
Our bodies entwine
And ecstasy cascades us.

Author notes

Well its my description of perfefect passion for 2 people in live, genderless. Hope everyone likes it.

Dedication: To my gf.
Written March 13th, 2004

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  • Desire gold member
    October 10, 2005
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    Very hot and erotic piece...
    What passion and images the write portrays~
    Bravo on a beautiful entry...
    Keep them coming

    Desire


  • silversurfer
    April 5, 2004
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    Tender and sensual, without being blatant and overtly in your face about it.

    It is, after all, all about loving and being loved. Sounds like you have the bases covered here.
    ~ss


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    April 2, 2004
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    This was a very good poem it is short but you can tell what is going on very well thanks for stoping by my page that means a lot I wish you luck in this contest and lots of love Robin...aka SH


  • March 25, 2004
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    ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh is a bit naughty lol
    just flicking through the random button so i ended up on your collab page


  • TheMechanicalAngel
    March 22, 2004
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    Wow,I love it. Great,awesome.Very very passionate. I love it. Good luck and thank you for entering my contest.


  • ceegeeess
    March 22, 2004
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    nice

    dear chiana, i am very much impressed by the passion in your poem! But it is strange for me how people of same sex enjoy ! From your poem I am to understand for love play the gender is not the criteria! The thought process is important for sexual infatuation!


  • macandrew
    March 14, 2004
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    good

    Very well done. An erotic poem with a real touch of class about it.

    thanks for sharing.
    john

  • MiDNiTeSuN
    March 13, 2004
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    Nice, i like the sensual detail, while at the same time still being a very love filled and romantic poem. I enjoyed it!


  • JustAnotherSuicide
    March 13, 2004
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    wonderful!!!

    very nice write! keep it up

    foralways and forever,
    AngelicLove (aka) Amanda

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