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-in patience our planets will allign-

smoke in fingertips whipser
      memories of your skin
along the tattered smile
        that i once crowned for your
weary weary head

your voice evades me
                leaving me in silence
strange how the radio
just doesnt cover up
                          the sound
                of every shatter
forming under my skin


my hands feel so empty without you
        feeding lips that crave
        whats so impossibly far
and ears that ache so sweetly
for each melodic tune that bears a
        star-struck
                star-hung haze
{lil peices of me tear down
with every note you sing}


                                -but in patience our planets will allign-


burn yourself into me
      fill every ash clad scar to the brim
and tilt every preschool glance
      into the oblivion of your arms
fight my intolerance to release
      and steal me from myself

[floating in strung out sleeplessness
for the patience to understand.
never forever will we wait
in this cross universe toxicity]



across the universe i will be.

Author notes

two days away from you.

dont know how much more i can take.

the radio just doesnt cover up the sound of silence.

playlist: bright eyes
chevelle
snow patrol

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  • forbidden-colour
    August 10

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    -but in patience our planets will allign-


    That was an interesting line sat among the rest,
    Patiently, I guess.
    Thank you for entering,
    Good luck
    Sophie


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    May 30
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    this just makes me so sad.... i love this poem. you would have gotten bronze but you didnt follow my rules. i'm sorry but i have to DQ you. T_T

  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    May 30

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    this is one of the best i've ever written [floating in strung out sleeplessness
    for the patience to understand.
    never forever will we wait
    in this cross universe toxicity]

    so so beautiful... you must be a finalist


  • Antebellum
    May 27
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    "but in patience our planets will allign-"


    I love this line.
    amazing write.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 23
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    when a song fills the air,we sit and enjoy... thank you for this entry... good luck
    Linda


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    May 22

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    "
    my hands feel so empty without you
    feeding lips that crave
    whats so impossibly far
    and ears that ache so sweetly
    for each melodic tune that bears a
    star-struck
    star-hung haze
    {lil peices of me tear down
    with every note you sing}"

    That was my favorite part
    This poem was truly great, The way you wrote it and all the feeling that went into it was wonderful !


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    May 21

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    what a wonderful write to the one you miss and love so dearly. this is a unique and superb take on the prompt, which i love. thanks for entering and good luck.

    • living-dust
      May 22
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      thank you very much! im glad you appreciated the thought i put into it. i wish you luck of a great turnout for your contest!


  • Nangaleema
    May 21

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    "burn yourself into me
    fill every ash clad scar to the brim"
    love that and "steal me away from myself"

    ah yes. i know what you mean. i relate to this tonight...

    • living-dust
      May 22
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      those were actually my favorite to parts of this. im glad and sorry you relate- as i am as well. thank you for your comments

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