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Wishful Thinking Now Let Go

Tall and proud I stand, flashing my smile.
Blue eyes full of intelligence I drown in.
One breath, one heartbeat, you got me hooked.
A laugh like the chime of bells shoots out of you.

Enveloped in your embrace, you hold me tight.
Nothing bad will happen to me, you won't let it.
This scene feels like a dream and not reality.
That's when I opened my eyes to the real world.

My smile disappeared once seeing that girl.
The one you love, that I wish I could be.
Envy screams inside my heart, wanting to escape.
I don't know if being just friends is enough anymore...

Could I tell you how I've felt for such a long time?
Would you whisper in my ear, "I feel the same way?"
These I know are nothing but my unfulfilled wishes.
Despite how it hurts to see you with her, I'm happy for you.

When you love someone you let them go; I'm doing that with you.
Although the hurt might be hidden, that doesn't mean I don't feel it.
You being happy my only wish, even if I sacrifice my feelings to see it happen.
One thing I can prove: by me giving you up, I love you more than that girl ever could.

This crushes me more than you would ever know my friend.
Having to conceal the truth behind tough barriers is too hard.
She must be a really lucky girl to have someone as special as you.
Now I'm doing the hardest thing in the world for me: saying goodbye to you.

Author notes

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Option 2, #1 (liking someone who has a girlfriend)

I can feel it deep inside of me that I'm in love with him, for I'd kill to see him happy, even if it meant sacrificing my own feelings to see it happen. You know when you love someone that you'd do ANYTHING in your power for them.

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 13

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    This was good, Nice poem about lost love. I enjoyed reading this. It was good! Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!


  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    September 27

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    This is truly beautiful. It is true that when you really love someone you want them to be happy even if it's not with you. Unselfish love is true love. Trying not to love someone is harder than loving them.

    Thank you for entering my contest.

  • saz 09
    August 1

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    thanks for entering. This was a lovely poem and its always better to lose someone you love to someone they love. That is how i feel because at least you know they are going to be happy. it was a lovely piece thanks and good luck.


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 31
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    thank you for entering this sweet poem


  • black-phenoqu
    July 14

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    this is not the best written poem.

    but it has a nice story line. the imagery in the first stanza is ok at best, but it all goes downhill -imagery wise- from there.


  • Leance
    July 12

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    I would like to thank you for taking the time to view and enter my contest.
    Contests here on Allpoetry are a lot of fun and I hope that everyone enjoys them.
    I will soon be posting a contest for BRONZE only poems. I do hope you will consider entering.

    If you are dreaming, you should be writing
    For dreams are words we should share
    Sharing makes us all stronger
    So thank you for sharing your dreams and words with me

    Judging:

    This is a very simplistic love story. It is very difficult to let one go however, it does make a person quite strong. I am not certain if you had a line requirement in all of the other contests it has been entered into however, it appears to be somewhat redundant.

    Title: I think the title is alright, if you really thought about it I think you could come up with one that does the poem credit.
    Content: The content was minimal as I stated previously it just appears redundant.
    Imagery: There isn't very much imagery as it is a very simplistic love story.
    Grammar: No real relevant errors.
    Flow: This flowed smoothly for the most part, didn't have to go back and re-read to catch something.

    A goal is a dream with a deadline.
    -Napolean Hill-


  • mackereth
    July 11

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    I really liked how you described the dream in the beginning, only to have that image shatter by the second stanza. Well done the emotions were well described. Nice write.


  • rainbows. gold member
    July 7

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    I know exactly how you feel. Lovely poem, I can understand it. Thank-you for entering this piece into my contest, and good luck.


  • JeremyWilliams
    June 3
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    Thank you and good luck


  • Intoxicated Dreams
    May 27

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    awwh, i sorry... your writing in this piece really sounds like it is comming from the heart, which makes it kinda sad... i hate when gurls steal your love...


  • Michelle-Elizabeth
    May 26

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    Wow. Nice. Really. I really like it

    "One thing I can prove: by me giving you up, I love you more than that girl ever could."

    That was a very emotional line. It describes just how much you love him.

    "She must be a really lucky girl to have someone as special as you.
    Now I'm doing the hardest thing in the world for me: saying goodbye to you."

    I love the ending too. It lets the reader back out gracefully.
    This is a really sweet and sad poem. Well done

    Keep writing thanks for entering, and good luck


  • Flipdaskript
    May 25
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    :)


  • Flipdaskript
    May 25

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    i like

    nice , yeah i feel yah...

    just letting them go even though it hurts....

    good stuff ...


  • poetry is soul
    May 24

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    this is exactly what i am looking for! i have sacraficed my heart over and over again for my best friend, so good job at showing this.

    One thing I can prove: by me giving you up, I love you more than that girl ever could.

    i concur. you know what i mean? its like... when you can finally sacrifice something, especially your soul or your heart, for someone you care for deeply, then you truly know you actually love that person. you would rather die than not see them happy, you know? i really like this. you did a really good job.


  • xXbleedingscarsXx
    May 21

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    COMPLETELY AWESOME!!!!!!!

    that was amazing!!! what made it even more powerful is that i can relate...that poem spoke my heart...TOTALLY INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!

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