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Those High School Years of Desperation, Hope, and Hazy Memories

We went through those last years of adolescence together,

and always went to parties,
the four or five of us
and sat in some corner talking to each other,

after realizing that no amount of mingling with the others

could rival the comfort of "best friends."

Hah. What a wonderful waste of time.

Drunk teenagers, and making out in the corner,
shots of vodka, washed down with beer.
Joints and cigarettes as chasers,
and pointlessly meaningful conversation.

Some of you split off into couples,
and I never really cared for it.
The last guy whose hand I could be bothered to hold
is now wearing an engagement ring from
his fiancée
on that same hand. 

 

The beauty of high school romance

is blurred with the memories of fights

and stupid jealousy, and blindly loving

some kid who stood out from the crowd, and proclaimed his love.

His adolescent, meaningless love.

 

Explore your youth, experiment with your health,

grow up with a nicotine addiction you can't beat,

and the thoughts of the first boy you fell in love with.

The thoughts that gnaw at your insides even though he's long gone,

studying engineering or business or something at a community college,

working at a Subway, and getting ready to marry the first

whore that came along and made him feel like more of an adult

than you could ever have been in that senior year.


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  • Wow

    This is a great poem. Some original and raw emotions there. I've never seen anything like this.

    "Some of you split off into couples,
    and I never really cared for it.
    The last guy whose hand I could be bothered to hold
    is now wearing an engagement ring from
    his fiancée
    on that same hand. "

    I really love that part
    Keep writing thanks for entering, and best wishes

  • this is amazing. so true as well. the emotions were wrote so strong. love this thank you for entering! :]

  • A very true write. Very blunt and raw. It kind of reminds me of a few people in-fact. Sad how drugs and partying are the "in" thing these days. Pssht. You seem a lot like me, which is cool. A fine job on this piece. Thanks for entering and good luck.


    • coversheet
      May 23
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      well actually, the point wasn't really to denounce drugs and partying, but to show how in high school, that just seems to be the boundaries of our world, whereas it's really not all that important.
      thank you very much for the comment ~ i appreciate it

  • You write like a person who has lived a lot more years than you have. That's a good thing because it means you'll only get better with time. This piece brings m back to those high school days which for me go a lot further back than yours do. I like your writing style. It is real, raw and down to earth.


    • coversheet
      May 21
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      Thank you, I try to make my poems more "raw", as you put it, because I don't really like the ones that overuse all those fluffy, nice rhetorical strategies in an attempt to make the truth sound prettier. So, good to know my tactics are working! Haha.

      i appreciate the comment ~

  • Interesting view on high school relationships, it's surprisingly raw and brash and honest. I like it's casual cynicism. Very cool write.


    • coversheet
      May 21
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      casual cynicism. i like that. in fact, yeah, i think that's the word for what it was meant to be. haha.

      thank you very much ~

  • so many lines in this that i could just say ya... thats right! but the whole thing was well done and the last thought about the guy falling for the first someone who made him feel more of an adult... i dont know, something just hit me about that. made me sad. but that is how it is with immaturity that thinks its mature.


    • coversheet
      May 21
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      yeah it's one of the main things that annoyed me about high school.
      everybody is actually really immature, and despite their best tries to act mature, they just can't do it.
      that's what i tried to express in the end, so thanks

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