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Summer

Sun beating harshly
Down on the flower fields
Making me thirsty.

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For a class to go with a print I'm making.

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  • So Strange
    June 22

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    This is kind of what any sane person feels like when they see that... but I guess it does depend on the person. I love to drink fluids--so long as it isn't buttermilk or alcoholic beverages--and this poem makes me want a glass of water or something... which I shall get right away.

    I think it is full of imagery, especially for something that is as short as this is. I hope you continue writing for as long as you want and feel like it. I love your writing and hope to read more soon.


    • Celticjedi
      June 24
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      Thank you! I miss talking to you too. We should make it a point to be on at the same time sometime. ...and that sounded weird. Ha ha, well. You know what I mean. Take care!


  • paullallady silver member
    May 31

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    This really brought up the feeling of "heat". The way you used the word "beating" instead of shining or other alternatives really relates what you were trying to portray. great job on this.