Didn't you know I loved you?
I only said it with my eyes
every time I smiled at you
Couldn't you tell,
it was there in the way we danced,
in that soft touch between your hand and mine?
Didn't you hear me?
I was telling you every time I made you laugh,
every time I caught your tears.
It's true I never told you so out loud.
But do the words themselves really make it true or real?
I spoke it every moment from hello until goodbye
Could I have shouted it any louder if I had tried?
And in the way you looked at me,
and smiled, and begged me not to leave,
I thought, I hoped, I prayed,
that I heard "I love you, too."
Author notes
Another one that I wrote awhile back but didn't post to this account.
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Can really appreciate and relate to the sentiments so very clearly expressed here. Appropriate use of rhetorical questions used to communicate how the poetic voice feels towards the subject of the poem. Agree with what's already been said about the final verse, it doesn't seem to flow in quite the same way as the rest, perhaps you might want to consider rewording it and playing around with the meter?
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Very easy to read and I liked the concept.
The last stanza didn't seem to flow as well as the rest - if I was going to change something I'd personally re-do the ending. Definitely don't give up working on this one!
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I heard what was said...the poem is an extension of the concept within it...well done.
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wow... this is sooo good... who is it about? NE ways... I love you baby... Evie
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