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Living Dead Girl

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Maybe despair can get the best of me,

because I wouldn't kill for popularity.

It's possible that some would disagree,

knowing that I'm a Cool Crowd escapee.

Perhaps my playlist would guarantee
I'll face some taunting, "witty" repartee.
Is being accepted preferable to being me?
I guess we'll just have to wait and see...


Then again, maybe I'm just a living dead girl...
 
 
 

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Image Prompt: credit.

Title is from a Rob Zombie song

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  • black hearted rebel
    June 22
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    Wonderful write


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    June 17

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    I am such a Rob Zombie fan, that's what drew me in, was the title...great song, excellent write here!!!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy
    Site Greeter


  • Cyanide Dreams
    June 14

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    This just didn't do it for me. Your imagery in this wasn't as strong as I'd like. Show us, don't tell us. However, your rhyme scheme is thought out well and your meter is very good. I did like, also, how you set this up. It was structured quite well. Good job, and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    June 5

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    I love this piece, it's refreshing and something different, you captured greatness here. Best to you in the contest


  • NoseRingGirl
    June 1

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    Nice! Love the Rob Zombie reference. He is pretty kickass, I'd have to say! Being yourself is the most important thing in life, and you reflected it very well in your fabulous words. Great job as usual, and good luck!


  • ARjarhead
    May 31
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    this is nice I like the flow and how it ends very good


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 30

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    Heheh LOVE that song,
    it's one of my favourite's
    of his aside from Dragula

    You did a great job on
    this one.. really enjoyed it.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • black hearted rebel
    May 29
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    WOW!This was wow! it was so realistic 2!


  • Draig aine gold member
    May 29

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    a most excellent write

    the dangers of being popular, an interesting subject well thought out, I like very much, good luck in the contest!


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    May 29

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    Being popular can never out weigh being true to yourself. A great poem written to the point. I would suggest that you always would have become the poet you are today even without AP. It just opened your heart and mind to the poetry that was always within.

    Thank you for entering "Peer Pressure the Third", Good luck.

  • Clare Mayer
    May 26
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    I like it.

    I like how you make a statement about not doing something just for popularity. Right on.


  • Leth gold member
    May 26

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    Amazing use of rhyme right here and I love the Rob Zombie reference .

    I just recently joined AP myself (my account says late February but I didn't actually became active until about 20 or so days ago, and I got to say, that since I've arrived I think I may have improved a bit as well. This site is definately inspiring me to try to push myself with formed poetry and prompt writing more - something I've never been good at.

    That said, amazing write. Love how every rhyme lines. It takes real skill to rhyme multiple times in succsession like that and make it not seem forced. Great job

    • DramaQueen469 gold member
      May 26
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      Yay! Someone who recognises a Rob Zombie reference!

      Thankyou so much for your lovely comment, my dear

      Maria


  • ChunkyC
    May 25

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    Bravo. You rhymed and it didn't suck. :] I never felt like it was forced and the choice of words was nice. The title was good, and the meaning of the poem was excellent. I was never part of the "Cool Crowd" either, so it's neat to read something like this. Wonderful write.

    Good job and good luck in the contest :]


  • OnlyOneLifeToLive
    May 21

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    both of your poems are excellent. I can tell your vocabulary has expanded and this is a new style than than the basic A, B, A, C, D, E, D, F rhyme scheme. Very good! Thanks for entering and Good Luck!


  • individuality gold member
    May 20

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    a good poem, ah popularity, neither would i kill for it, though quite possibly just maim, good rhythm and flow and rhyme


  • Edie gold member
    May 20
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    Far from dead! I like the way your write plays out.
    Good Luck in the contest!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    May 20

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    Well done! I like the concept and imagery you painted with your words...but the closing line is excellent...there are more of us out there like this then many would think.

    Best to you!
    mystic


  • white stone
    May 19

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    Well... I like the tone of your poem, as well as the image you chose, but I'm not a big fan of lyrics in poetry unless the prompt is a song...
    Also, the border with trees along with the purple links really clash with the image, which is completely devoid of purple or any colors that compliment it.
    Sorry, just doesn't fit my tastes.
    Thank you for your entry.

    • DramaQueen469 gold member
      May 20
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      Thankyou for your comment; the line at the end isn't a lyric, I do apologise for any confusion; the title is the title of a song. It seemed to fit somehow... to me, anyway!
      As for the background, it was the automatic one to come up when this was a reserve, and I had to log off before I could change it... which I'm about to do
      Again, thankyou for commenting; I appreciate it

      Maria

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