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Fallin for you

I have fallin in love with you
I kow, I know it wasn't hard to do
But now what must I say
I think you feel the same way
But if this is so
Why don't you let me know
You said all the right things that night
And I took it in fright
Maybe you do know me as you say
But when will it be the day
That you can take me in your arms
Never let go just hold on
You show that youlove me
BUt  you never say
So I wait

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  • teddybare
    May 22
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    waiting

    is the hardest part ... thats what i call a truche

    pretty good rhyme flows ok too


  • Keyser Soze
    May 22

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    A feeling well expressed. I enjoy the second and third to last line rhyme, very modern. You should work more on that: more physical pronunciation/shaping rhyme than same syllables, etc.
    Keep up the good work