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Unrequited

The sun bows respectfully  
ever so gently reclaiming its warmth.

Like the rising chill,

you choose now
to present yourself.

 

All the treachery
laces your mood bitter,
each word barbed and pointed
to pierce this corpulent figure.

That insane feeling bubbles 'til
acceptance laughs out loud,

She thinks you love her...

I continue to tug,

a little harder each time
to reclaim each part of me given~

~unrequited...

Author notes

The Prompt:

"I brought down the sky for you, and all you did was shrug"

This is a line from yet another song.

It's by Rise Against, and it's called Audience of One.
http://www.songlyrics.com/rise-against/audience-of-one-lyrics/

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  • JinSays gold member
    June 14
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  • JinSays gold member
    June 12

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    That insane feeling bubbles 'til
    acceptance laughs out loud,

    She thinks you love her...


    Good god Delila, I was sooo not ready for this write.
    There's a reason you're on my favorites list love, and it's not just because you post awesome prompts.
    This write is just aching for a trophy. You're amazing, thank you sweetheart-for penning such brillaince for this contest.
    Love,
    jin


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 31

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    "That insane feeling bubbles 'til
    acceptance laughs out loud,

    She thinks you love her..."

     

    tonight has been a wonderful night

    of reading truly GOOD poetry.  The

    above quoted phrase simply gave

    me goosebumps.  Thank you for

    reading my poetry, too, btw You

    are certainly a treasure.

     

    love, lane


  • Desire gold member
    May 25

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    Dangggg~

    Oh My~ I was reading and my jaw kept dropping Powerful piece Beautiful and this certainly spills with emotions~ my eyes need windshield wipers now
    Excellent Voice~ from the Heart
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • thepoetssoul
    May 24

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    I'll keep my eyes open for you
    This is a perfect penning for this contest.
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 21

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    This sure tells it where you want it to be.
    Hard and focused.
    FIDO.


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    May 20
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    back with a vengeance I see and I like it!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    May 19

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    excellent~

    Loved this one sis
    You said it all so well and so true
    And like cannonsfire says the ace is the one you don't play.......................
    Best of luck in the contest
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~~


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 19

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    TAke back the pieces of you, until you are whole again.
    Well written.


  • Cannonsfire
    May 19

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    It's treacherous if you are never aware of the game played but sometimes the ace is the one you don't play. There is often a fifth one held up the sleeve. It's the safe bet. C

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