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Capture Me In Teardrops

 

Sweet tears of joy flow down my grave face....

 

It's amazing what pleasure I received from

The news of your depature, I could not help

But rejoice in the fact that you were forever:

 

Gone...

 

Sincere tears of pride flow down my sullen face....

 

In hopes that I shall never have to be beaten

By the words of hatred and cruelty will never

Darken my door again, for you are forever:

 

Gone...

 

Softened tears of recovery flow down my bleak face....

 

Knowing that I shall never be forsaken by you,

Wishing to capture me within your tyranny of

Abuse, for I no longer have to worry, it's simply:

 

Gone...

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Title Prompt: Capture Me In Teardrops

 

Picture Prompt:http://th06.deviantart.com/fs29/300W/i/2008/107/8/f/teardrops_by_teresa_lynn.jpg

 

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  • blueyez
    June 1

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    I liked this! A strong good bye to an abuser!
    Peace and Love

  • llett009
    May 26

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    woohoo!

    i love the way you changed your "expression" throughout the poem. its very original, and profound. = )

  • SeniorBabe09

    I love this poem! It is really nice. I mean how the person that was so horrible is gone. I love the last four stanzas because it really just sums up the whole poem in itself. If I were to change it I would make it longer. But other than that it is really good. Put more imagery in it.

  • A very profound write. The strength in this speaks volumes. So many of the lines I loved. Nice use of repitition as well. I hope you do well.

  • cruel harsh and brilliant wow you pack a punch and
    I know if this is real then he deserved it . if its mere fantasy we deserved it thank you for a gutsy performance,

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