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Leaving. (Mondo)

Watching the village
people are always leaving
why do our friends leave their home

Our friends have to leave
so they can learn the value
and beauty of their homeland




Andrew Hide
13~03~2004

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Written March 13th, 2004

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  • Sprite silver member
    March 19, 2004
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    You are so right when you say that some people don't know how lucky they are until they leave what they had. Home can never be duplicated anywhere else. It can only be replaced.


  • Kitesen
    March 17, 2004
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    Also to overcome long boring travels at least if the compannionship is good.
    Maybe an idea to introduce to travelagencies (what you Thomas!) it might lift up their standing a bit.
    But for this one nice done it looks easy but I think to do this powerfull and critical it takes a lot of inventivity.


  • haikumonk gold member
    March 14, 2004
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    Interesting write........ seems kind of fun to do though.... like a renga. Interactive poetry is perfect for wine and party time!!!! lol......... take care Andrew.

    Don


  • BillS2
    March 14, 2004
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    Excellent

    Hi Andrew:
    Excellent Mondo. Beautifully expressed. I learned a little as well, from the style. Thanks for such a wonderful Mondo. Bill

  • Billbard silver member
    March 13, 2004
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    Andrew.Well said.There is no place like like home and no better way to appreciate it than to be away from it for a long time.

    Bill


  • Deviantpoetess
    March 13, 2004
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    excellent

    Great write as always.I like the Q and A form as well..makes you think of what once was .Leaving something behind my sis n law is Chinese and she spoke about a sugar paket used in the tea I bought her..She said when I was little I used to run through the farmlands and take sugar cane(she wasnt supposed to she would share it with her friend) She misses not only her family but her homeland..The little things in life we never forget.even a sugar packet Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work
    ~lori


  • SusanL
    March 13, 2004
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    You make this seem so incredibly easy.... I am working on another and finding the right voice just seems tough....Yet another lovely piece...Susan


  • AndrewHide silver member
    March 13, 2004
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    Thankyou Pari, Yes the mondo is a question and answer form, it dates back to very early Japanese poetry. The first stanza (katauta) would often be written by a poet, and the second would be written by another. (It may have been used in instruction of Zen) These can be fun, although hard, to do with a friend as nogenreneeded and myself have recently done.

    Andrew
    Edited on Mar 13, 8:10 because ''.


  • March 13, 2004
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    This is beautiful Andrewhide.. it is simple yet has a depth.. a serene feel of a parent and child sitting quietly observing and the child asking the question and the parent answering the child from their experience of previously leaving and returning.
    Jani

  • Pari Ali
    March 13, 2004
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    Tis seemed to be a question and answer style where the first stanza asks a question and the second answers it. Having left my own country I applaud you for your depth of wisdom. Nothing increases the value of something more than to be partd from it. excellent Andrew!

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