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forgive me.







i leave myself
like a crushed suit
on the floor

after you
have emptied
your pockets of time
to iron me, caress me
into elegance.

it doesn’t matter
that with a fork
and a loose attitude,
i allow myself
to crumble-

what hurts like
undeserved heaven
is how you’ve
got my back
though i almost gave
up on myself
before i was born;

your comfort-tea eyes
are worth so much more.

as i drop
the vase of me
and get used
to the shatter sound,

the only
reason to weep
is because

i have let you down.






Author notes

May 20, 2009

I feel so sad and sorta wish I could talk to someone. I don't get it. I could have had someone help and it's my own damn fault. It means a lot to me... I have no idea what to do. But even when I'm past the breaking point and just give up, it saddens me so much when I think he helped me and wanted me to succeed but I blew it. I'd stay up all night - if necessary, I *will* stay up all night... but I'm just not seeing it...

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  • Simply Simple
    June 26

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    A very beautiful poem. I really do love it. And although it didn't make me cry (don't feel bad, I've been saying that to just about everyone) I really love this poem. Thank you for entering it.

    • piggyback
      June 26
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      thanks

      & nah, it's ok; only one poem made me cry in my entire life and it's not like there haven't been a lot of poems I've loved. So...


  • AkitoTae
    May 22
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    The flow is great, and I can see where you are coming from here, it's a good write, and to let you know, you can't blame yourself for the past, only head for the future, get in there and keep going, you can... It's a matter of will. That's something I learned the hard way. Anyway, sorry for my rambling, good luck in the contest! ^_^


  • aanika
    May 19

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    the ending is a kick in the face.
    it's awesome.

    though i almost gave
    up on myself
    before i was born;

    lovelove.
    and comfort-tea is beautiful.
    <3


  • decode
    May 19

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    "as i drop
    the vase of me
    and get used
    to the shatter sound,"

    this poem has sadness leaking out of every word.
    especially the stanza I pasted. so broken and quietly aching.

    I'm sorry. :[

    • piggyback
      May 19
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      Thank you. That's what I was going for - I'm glad to hear it actually worked this time.


  • oddpupts
    May 19

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    no it's beautiful

    i had to re-read it once but other then it being a little confusing at times it was a wonderfully written poemWink

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