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Monday Morning Blues.


Monday morning blues, getting out of bed
breakfast to be made, papers to be read.
Trudging down the street , collar pulled up high
shivering and cold, snowflakes in the sky
waiting for the bus, light myself a smoke
some guy made me laugh told a dirty joke.
Boss is right on time, I'm ten minutes late
tells me off for fun, this is what I hate.
See a pretty girl, started just today
should I ask her out ? Wonder what she'll say ? 

Pretty girl said yes, thought that she'd say no
took her for a meal, took her to a show.
Oh she was so nice, never mind the rain
Tuesday morning smile, seeing her again.

 

 

 




 

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Enter poems written in a particular form...

Northborough sonnet. I found the form some months ago, it still has the strict syllable count but has an aabbccdd........ rhyme scheme.

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  • rinzurajan
    October 30

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    i wasnt familiar with this sonnet form...good job with this...i got a nice feel after reading it...

    good luck

  • ecrivain01
    July 19
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    Cute poem ...

    and very nicely done.

  • Thor-201
    May 20
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    This is really a great read, a poem I thoroughly enjoyed

  • Beautiful flow to this. Not a sonnet form Im familiar with- thanks for sharing it. I like the ending Lovely rhyme.
    K


  • EmptyFrame
    May 19

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    Excellent Form

    It's rare to see a poem that fits a form such as this one. It's extremely well written. At first I was worried that the good fortune would go down, but the optimism in the end provides a satisfying unexpected twist.

    Because of the form, the line "need to get my pay" kind of sticks out awkwardly, as the idea of work is kind of over. It seems like that line should be about you contemplating asking the girl out. Just an idea.

    Excellent write!

    ~Xan

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