Fall asleep wearing your sweatshirt
Hidden in every fold: comfort
Needing the safety I will feel
Sometimes to know that this is real
Dream of falling into your eyes
An ocean before the storm will rise
A stunning colour I'll always remember
Even in the dead of winter
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For Jason <3
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This is great! I had to laugh, cause I know it's about Jason, and well, I have to laugh at him. It's just what I do. He's kinda like a little brother. Great write!
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i know. many people do have to laugh about it. but its still true! lol
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i love the beauty intertwined in this piece Sadie; i can feel the love radiant off it
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How wonderful
A beautiful love poem, expressing love in a very genuine and honest way -
Aw, this is so nice!! It's short and says a lot within these few lines. I can feel the intense emotions throughout the entire poem.
The only things I see that might need changing is instead of i being lower case maybe make it a upper case - "I" ?
Typo with "teh" on the 6th sentece - should be "the".
I do see a couple of words that might not need to be in the poem but hey those words flow nice with it anyway.
Keep on penning!
Kari
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thank you so much for reading it. I also appreciate the critism. I'll make sure to correct them!
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No problem! It is a really great piece
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