Hello,
dark cloud hanging over our heads.
delivering all of our mistakes first hand,
dangling infront of our faces.
you can't push away this Blinding light,
now that everyone is pointing and laughing ,
with every "I told you so",
the world has turned soo cold and bloody,
all the faces have changed...
the ones you've loved are died and gone,
the ones who pretend to care all along...
are the ones who hold us now.
we all live in bitterness,
let the dark angel win this time,
he takes over the world,
we can't take in change...
we die in are own sin.
we die
we die
we die
in are own bitterness,
our down fall it will be.
Author notes
the way the world will one day end or how its ending...
got this idea from a smashing pumpkins song.
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what do you think about this, what do you think its about?
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this is genius.
i love the third stanza,
and smashing pumpkins is great
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WOW! this was really good! I could feel the emotions in your piece as I read this. I enjoyed this read; you're very talented when it comes to writing poetry. You made some good points in this as well; this world has issues and people just sit back and ignore it. keep up the good work! thanks for enteringt and good luck in my contest!
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I feel this too. I feel like this world has soo many issues, and no one is taking a real charge. And we have people fighting, true heroes dying, for no reason at all. Your words were heard.
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You are my HERO for writing this, I love this song by The Smashign Pumpkins, although I prefer the song The Beginning is the End... but both are nice. Anyways, this is an amazing poem.
the ones you have loved have died and gone,
the ones that have pretend to care all along...
Favorite lines. ♥
Keep up the fantastic work.
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Hmm, interesting poem. A bit apocalyptic I think, but you expressed your thoughts and feelings well here. I would have never made the connection to a song from the "smashing pumpkins"
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