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I need some help!

(NOTE: I need some help finishing these lyrics. I just can't think right now.)

-country/pop themed-

verse 1

last lines are:

True she's got them spikey bracelets
But I swear she's only fakin'
if 10 pairs of blue jeans don't give her away...
(the begining lines before this should talk about how the girl acts like a rocker)



chorus(gone into from last lines above) :

Mandy's got a mustang
Silver spurrs painted on the sides
Mandy's got a mustang
and it blares willy nelson late at night
She really tries to hide it
If you ask her she'll deny it
Oh but she ain't foolin' me...
Mandy's got a mustang


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Author notes



Okay I need one more verse and bridge. The verses should end like the one above so that they can go into the chorus.

The basic idea is about this girl who dresses and acts like a rocker girl, she's from california but her family is living in one of the southern states now. Everybody here listens to country but she acts like she hates it. Now, I don't want ya to talk abiut her mocing there and all that really, it's more about her being a rocker who secretly likes country music but I though a little backgrounf might help you understand what I'm going for. Any ideas, even if its just a line, would be appreciated.


Oh and the next verse should probably have other examples of why he suspects she secretly digs country music. I think anyway LOL.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Well I think that this song of yours could be a soft rock that transitions into a country ballad. you could have the girl describing her self trying to fit in with this new sub-culture. you can desribe how the character attempts to fit in and fails because she is being someone who she is not...1love old friend


  • JadalaStar
    May 19
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    Wow I really shouldn't type so fast, I spelled words like a third grader....possibly worse. LOL

    oh well.



    -me