it is the edge you could never see ,because your fingertips
could never reach your toes. Its the language
of instincts you forgot how to listen too, like the whispers of
trees and the timeless wisdom of animals.
It is the romance and offspring
of circles, triangles and
squares liquefying the rainbow.
It's the everything you forgot how
create from nothing.
it is the forgotten grass
and sand between your toes
it's the lost faith and sight.
A clean piece of simple paper,
gently textured like the skid marks of clouds, the feeling of 'sky high'
only humble in its delectable vastness.
Wielding the sky you have become
its elected decorator.
Serene is blue melded in green,
like the cream indigo above a vibrant forest.
can you taste the scented history of ancient yet assimilated trees?
you can't can you? you can only taste your own clouded skies
this hand to this paper the cacophony of humanity's mind it is perfected and honed
in all its terror and turmoil , it is loved, it is hated,
and it is a repeated endless cycle.
but...
it's when a creator forgets creativity
it's when the compassionate forget passion
it's when humanity forgets how to hold a creation with love
it's when emotion becomes just a motion of survival.
it's when all is forgotten by humanity and
i wonder where the hell i am?
and why the hell did i come down here?
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And as I sit here wondering why I think way back to the past when life meant something. But now there are just shadows, dreams and visions. take the better part of life & embrace it , deeply.
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There are a few typo's here which was a little distracting but your ideas are beautiful! "like the cream indigo above a vibrant forest" -- I love that! The last two stanzas are fantastic.
This really, is quite beautiful, perhaps a bit raw in format and style, but I would like to read it again later.
Thanks for entering
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"can you taste the scented history of ancient yet assimilated trees?"
I can easily see why Carol was so enthralled by this incredible piece of work, Poet. Your descriptions within these lines are pure, vibrating pulses of poetry. It's as if you've been writing for centuries, although I noted your youth. No matter. Some of us were born Old Souls, it seems. Ancient wisdom drips from your fingers like sea water, drenching the shoreline with awareness. An amazing poem, overflowing with shadows & light...the distilled essences of what it takes to be a creative being. Very impressive. I've added you to several of my lists. I look forward to reading more from you, as I'm sure Carol does, too. Congratulations on your silvery chalice. Brava!!!
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thank you!
also thank you for the correction
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What a powerful piece of poetry. I am dumbstruck with the power of it.
Here is where I stopped breathing:
"its the forgotten grass
and sand between your toes
its the lost faith and sight.
A clean piece of simple paper,
gently textured like the skid marks of clouds, the feeling of 'sky high'
only humble in its delectable vastness. Wielding the sky you have become
its elected decorator.
serene is blue melded in green,
like the cream indigo above a vibrant forest.
can you taste the scented history of ancient yet assimilated trees?
you can't can you? you can only taste your own clouded skies
this hand to this paper the cacophony of humanity's mind it is perfected and honed
in all its terror and turmoil , it is loved, it is hated,
and it is a repeated endless cycle." -
i came here
because of you
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