You are the keeper of my heart ~
The one and only I adore, I give my heart
Too you to hold now and forevermore
I place my heart in the sky
for the whole world to see
this is how much I love you my dear
my love is so sincere
Let not my heart be cast into the wind
Where your heart cannot follow
lets take this journey together
forever you and me
Just beyond the sunset
your love waits for me
Just beyond the sunset
Lies my true destiny
Where the grey mountains
Lie in deep tranquillity
There you'll find the treasure
Of my love eternally
A contest entry
- Come write me a poem by Maili Knephthan.
700 points, ended May 31, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Been a while since I stopped by to read some of your work ( certainly my loss)
I saw this title and it just drew Me right in.
Not a least bit suprised .you never cease to amaze Me with your selfless work.
Sometimes it is hard to tell if this is a profession of Faith or the living truth between two compatible loving Hearts,
It really touched Me very deep.
Thank you My Friend.
God Bless.
ED.
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So selfless
I feel your kindess all over this peice and the words are so endearing. I can always tell by your poetry you have a sweet soul and I need to stop being so caught up in my world and come out to read your poetry more often cause it makes me feel wonderful.
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Wonderful
This is a great piece
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The love that you write about seems almost monumental, the language is very pleasant, not overwhelming and allows for safe and clear passage of every sinew of language and emotion for this very special person to seep through, allowing for a very pleasant experience for the reader. Well done!
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Good
It is structured well, and flows easily. Quite good!
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a good poem, ah love, it can be a beautiful thing at times, lifting our smiles and spirits into the air where we can swirl in the textures and laugh life.
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"You are the keeper of my heart ~
The one an only I adore, I give my heart
Too you to hold now and forevermore
I place my heart in the sky
for the whole world to see
this is how much I love you my dear
my love is so sincere"
These two stanza's hold a great deal of emotion. I can relate to them a great deal. You did a good job with this the flow is right on and the rhythm worked very well. Thank you for sharing.
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