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...& stars sing sight.

 

 

 

 

 

i am sleepy visions--

 

ones that sit

in a sort of silence,

whilst my posture

presents itself peaceful:

 

i have tucked thinning woes

behind my ears

and adorn life's disasters

 

[like dust]

 

around my pretty palate,

that slathers secrets

to unknown weights

of withered release...

 

and my prayers

clasp inhales

before they escape.

 

[my sighs soar

from heights to deepest low

and i trace scars

in the wink of a cry,

to nurture echoes that wept

many eons ago]

 

i kneel within realisations--

 

that comatosed circumstance

stands naught of a nuance

where feet find

only freedom to traverse

 

and so i slumber sated,

thankful to fate...

 

for simple survival.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • good..........i'm new i this site........so plz encourage me by viewing my poem
    i've given u full marks

  • whoa............

    hey,really good work there,lot's of emotion,and i love your use of words,very well done!

  • Good use of alliteration in the last 3 stanzas. A good read


  • coversheet
    May 21

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    this type of writing seems to me very suitable for a song.
    and also, you seem very bent on alliteration in that last stanza, haha.
    good writing.

  • absolutely breathtaking. i think you will be a top finalist. this was perfectly what i was looking for. your descriptions and alliteration were perfect
    thank you for entering in my contest

  • Many times I have felt this way but then I wake up and the day is there and I go on as you do too C


  • Antebellum
    May 18
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    oooh the italics make this soo powerful. amazing write.

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