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(old) souls

Vibrant and alluring,
demure with a jester's smile,
you, transforming the very way I comprehend the world,
came blazing like deisel
calling me on with some rememberance
the wind carries on her shoulders.

The connection immeadiate,
lucid, and electric by shear force of nature.
Dangerously intense with feeling yet deaf to my ears.

Pure goodness is all I  feel in these moments,
you radiate a light few can truely see,
call me lucky.

For you and I,
at least for long moments,
time melts down
to a transparent layer through which
we could see what is there.
You feel like home to me , then.

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This is for someone who is very special. Some people you miss before you ever meet them...

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  • sevnsyn silver member
    August 24
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    I came back

    I came back to your page because of a comment you left,what I read on your page made me want to read all your poetry,After being deeply consumed by the beauty of this poem I must say The heartfelt laughter at seeing my comment was an emotional shock- I had already been here..The effect was the same..Fantastic poem..I takes me somewhere..so intense ..I can see her face and smell her perfume..I love it when poetry works..regardless the emotion..Thank you for this!

  • sevnsyn silver member
    May 18

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    Love it

    This is fantastic,It is alive with emotion. It hit me very hard as I just lived through something like this,even some of the words used are the same. Great write.