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Gone to Earth

Cold slate grey existence
always individual fractions.
Never ready, always hiding,
shield my eyes from onlookers,
shield my ears from criticism,
loose skin waiting to tear;
worn too thin, held too solid.

 

Seen too much turmoil,
borne too many scars.
Unable to muster strength,
sink slowly into earth,
grey turning blue, turning green,
turning away; abandons me
when needed most
or needed least.
Alone at last

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  • Adamastor
    November 21
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    Gone To Earth is Good.

    It was an enjoyable read. Kind of reminded me when John "The Baptist" Hucknell wouldn't pay attention when I asked him to plug a 3.5 mm jack lead into the aux in socket when I was dubbing one of my old tracks from tape to hard drive on my Sony Gigajuke Hi-Fi Stereo system. To you that might not make sense, but if you was there, you'd understand. (For one thing, when I had a go at him, he was shielding his ears too!). Anyway nice write. If I had some points I'd be able to give you a score, but I don't unfortunately, so I give you my grattitude for sharing this lovely piece of work. I mean that sincerley, not sarcastically.


  • sgking123 gold member
    November 16

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    wow

    this was an intensely interesting read...right from the pay of colors to the humility of the mother earth ..I guess i had been floored quite a bit by the flow.guess you should come visisiting me


  • chael
    November 10

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    I can hear,

    the dirt. Shovel full by shovel full by,,, it's dark and so very, very cold, and the sound fades to a silent scream. Echoing throughout my brain, my brain, my brain, my......chael tip of the hat I love this ( and if I neglected to follow the rules I'm truely sorry. I'm afraid I suffer from low comprehension and a lot of times what I read don't click in my brain so I tend to get mixed up) and thank you so very much if you need some points for a future contest i can give you some. how about a thousand? I don't do nothing with 'em anyway


  • Theappleofyoureye
    November 10
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    This was short but intense, amazing imagery.


  • jackreed3 gold member
    May 18
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    Very sad.. I hope its not true... your friend in Poetry JackReed3

  • OurxBeginning
    May 18

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    I agree, a lot of emotion in this. A sad write, I can relate and I'm sure many can. I liked the twist at the end, very impacting. Short and simple. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • Dark Angel Reborn
    May 17

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    I love the imagery in this piece. The poem is simple, but compelling. Good write

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