Make love to me in dreams of sweet caresses
Where I may bask in gentle tenderness
Then let me drown beneath your golden tresses
Your merest touch would be the end to stress
I find the thought of holding you exciting
Your eyes can tell me tales of passion's place
When I close mine my mind begins delighting
In promises writ large upon your face
When first we met you changed my expectations
I looked at every day another way
With just a hint of intimate relations
I found the words I knew I had to say
When you touched me you also touched my heart
I cannot see a love if we're apart
In a list
A contest entry
- A Salute to the Sonnet by Ceridwens Soul.
3000 points, ended June 10, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shakespearean Sonnet Competition: "PREVIOUSLY WRITTEN" WORK ONLY. by Vera Rich.
490 points, ended June 15, 51 entries
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It is refreshing to find someone who uses alternating masculine and feminine rhymes in a Sonnet (as Shakespeare did on many occasions!.
I am, however, a little worried about line 7.. the concatenation "mine-my-mind" grates a little on my ear. Are YOU really happy about it?
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Again you write love with such a panache and flaire that inspires many a poet to reach for higher standards. A signature Jeff write.
Thank you again
~ceridwen~
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Green green, it's green they say...
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This is simply beautiful. I love it and I love you
Good luck
Passions
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A beautiful romantic sonnet, what more could one ask for
All the best
Sue
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Thank you for your entry, good luck
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