She twirled her hair,
which flowed like empty years
through bitter fingers,
absent-mindedly watching the rain
splash relentlessly on the window
a deep sigh -
drudged up from some forgotten place
hidden between her spine and protruding ribs
when she spoke
it was the same slow, sad melody
that had been gnawing at her
for eight long, hard months
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. This was amazing. You did a fantastic job with the emotion here.
Write on.
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very good
i love your use of words....your very descriptive.....it's deep and i love it .....keep writing
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Good imagery.Deep emotions.Try to make it rhym
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