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lusting for your black heart

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flower petals shrivel, crust up as you walk by
inside my heart is burning with sweet desire
needing your touch, wanting your bite
everything in the end is going to be alright
through the night’s I loom and pray to candle light
that your going to be my sweetheart someday
we can fly the sky together and hunt for our prey
just hoping that you will turn me, I will always obey
Surrender to you is what I will always do
Affinity stirring as I look up to you
Derive pleasure from your embrace
Anything to listen to our heart beats race
The un-dead walking forever more
You my love, I will always adore

 

 



 

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  • lovemedeath
    October 12
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    love it!!! Great job!


  • Knight70
    August 12

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    Oooh, you had stirring with this chilling piece.

    I'm so glad you wrote another vampire piece, Kaylee. I love the prompt that inspired you. Those ice cold, numb eyes say it all when it comes to revealing her black heart. Very well expressed!

    Don

  • Beautiful. Lustful darkness. I really liked this a lot. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kahy


  • moaner
    May 19

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    wow thats fucked up! look at the girl in the picture, the way she is standing, then look at your profiel picture next to it. its almost like a shadow of what you could be, or the dark side of you!? this is a great poem though, you really caught the darkness of the vampire thing, but it was also beautiful as well, just tinted black underneath. nice write x

  • very nice take on pic prompt and that pic so innocently seductive .. go girl thats great penning there

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