The dew eyed doe seeks dappled shade,
as great horned stag ruts in the glade,
she'll feign she does not see him there;
this season when love's games are played.
Take heed you other stags, beware
pain can ensue in this affair
and even death waits in the wings,
when horn on flesh will leave bone bare.
Love is the same for knaves or kings,
when fickle spring her magic brings,
then petalled boughs like soft brocade
will bend to hear each vow that's made.
Author notes
Rubaiyat
A contest entry
- Re doing the Style Contest by Night Terrors.
990 points, ended June 10, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everybody Wins! ***Quickie*** by WaterChild Reborn.
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Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Oh wow! You had me at "dew eyed doe". Excellent write!
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Excellent job. Thanks for your entry. I really loved the first line.
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I really think this needs to be on the finalist list again loved it then love it now :
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yes, it is wonderful! You will do fabu in the contest, i reckon
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Wow, this was brilliant.
You did a wonderful
job at reeling in the
audience with the
beauty of your words.
Best wishes in the contest
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WONDERFUL! You really did such a great job you did the style prefectly love the imagery and the rhyming was flawless I am adding this to the finalist list
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This is gorgeous, as usual. "Love is the same for knaves or kings/ when fickle spring her magic brings," What beautiful lines! What a wonderful generalization from such a fine description of deer. Best of luck in the contest!
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" Love is the same for knaves or kings,
when fickle spring her magic brings,"
this is the part i love the most...
an amazing write... good luck in the contest ^_^
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Great Style
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Wow.
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Ah, that feeling of love in the springtime! It does happen to all animals, a wonderful time indeed!
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Brava!
My dear poet...
it is always a joy to vist your words.
This was an extra special visit!
Brava!
Jane
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You have chosen an excellent title and set a good standard with this one, covering your topic well and maintaining the rhyme scheme without any apparent strain. I particularly like the image and simile in line 11.
In line 2, should "as" be "a"?
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Hi, many thanks, no ,it is meant to be as, Di
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