Left behind
Forgotten
Desperately looking for light
Neglected sorrow
Dying
Alone for another night
I know you loved me
And God know I loved you too
Now withered in a fading memory
Just a dying feeling I once had for you
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A contest entry
- PREWRITE!!!!! by darkscorpia.
640 points, ended May 19, 131 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - lost of love by darkangelcutter.
400 points, ended June 4, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Finalists Comment
Congratulations on making the finalists list. I am planning to close the contest on Thursday, May 21st. This is your graded comment.
Spelling, Grammar & Organisation: 14/15
Good use of stanzas
Written Expression: 18/20
You convey strong emotion and feeling with a small amount of words
Poetic Devices: 8/10
Good meter
Creativity: 16/20
Good, but slightly cliché
Wow Factor: 9/10
Bonus Points- 2
Total: 92/100 -
Very good. I would capitalise God.
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It's saad >.<
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this is breathtaking..
whatever more i shall say will not bring it justice
clear thoughts, wonderful wording
and it really just jumps..
nice work
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