you are a star
in a claustrophobic sky
that forgot it needed to shine, I said.
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I wish pictures could talk
I see you smiling your biggest smile
but in 20 years I may not know why
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I may even forget the unrefined poet you are
so i'll suck in your voicebox with a kiss
and allow your words to multiply in my womb
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silent birth
drink speech from my bosom, she said
and generously fertilize, with your poetic seeds, my foolscap folio heart
Author notes
(2009-5-16)
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest Best Prewrites From May 2009 by amaranthine lover.
1225 points, ended June 18, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I may even forget the unrefined poet you are
so i'll suck in your voicebox with a kiss
and allow your words to multiply in my womb
definitely my favorite stanza.. very well written
the second stanza
is less poetic-- trying to figure out what you can do with it.. i think its the two smiles.. and the word biggest
great opening too..
such a pleasure to read you here in my contest.. thanks so much
mary
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Congrats on the silver hun,
it was well deserved.
A very heartfelt piece with
such lovely imagery
& deep metaphor -
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This is lovely. I love this quite a bit. I think it may be my favourite piece of your's!
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Touching!
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I really loved the first two lines. They were so poetic. Great job. You've got awesome talent.
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Thank you.
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my goodness this was imaginative and captivating. Im very impressed with this. nicely donei hope you do well.
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thank you!
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Nicely done, and certainly conversational.
All the best,
mj.
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