a chilled spring breeze
comes and strokes my cheek lightly
I sigh and breathe deep
the petals awake
stretching long blossoming
vibrant colours shine
birds swoop through the sky
riding the new winds of spring
happy to be home
Please tell me what you think
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Well done, I like them all. In your third Haiku leave the "the" out of the first line. Maybe try: Soft petals awaken/stretching long blossoms/vibrant colors shine. Your last Haiku is great.
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yeah that was my initial thought however if you count it makes it 6 syllables
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Maybe i cannot count: soft pe/tals awa/ken (5) is it not 5
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a-wak-en is three
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The last one is my favorite
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Mine too
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